diminishing verse- an attempt, pt. 2!

hi there!

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how are you guys?

i’m back again with some diminishing verse- but i’ve found a different word. hopefully it’ll turn out better… fingers crossed! you can check out my first attempt here.

🀞🏼🀞🏼🀞🏼

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rivulets flow, twining around each other- a fluid, graceful pleat,
bubbling and gurgling, they glide briskly along the leat,
the mill awaits their arrival; hungering, ready to eat.

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okay so you’re probably like-

i understand. the poem makes absolutely 0 sense unless one understands the context first.

BUT!!!! ALLOW ME TO EXPLAIN!!!!

first off- a “pleat” is a fancy way of saying “fold”. here’s a picture to make life easier-

you get what i mean now? just comparing the way that the rivulets flow to pleats.

a “leat” is a waterway of sorts-

it’s a really posh, top-notch synonym for aqueduct. or canal. the word “leat” is British in origin. leats were dug to supply water to ponds, mills, or other such areas. hence the last line- “the mill awaits their arrival; hungering, ready to eat.” in the olden days, mills were often powered by the churning of water- an ancient form of hydroelectricity/hydropower, one might say.

you’re probably still confused about the last line… you know how a person eats? that’s how they get energy, right? since the mills were water-powered, they were waiting to “eat” the water. it’s a personification of sorts.

so, yeah. my advise is to read the poem over so that it’ll {hopefully} make more sense.

xD!

tell me what you think, okay? ALL criticism/improvements/comments are welcome. don’t hold back!

thanks for reading. see y’all next week!

love always,
[gotw}

Published by girrrrrl_of_two_worlds

hi! just a nerdy girl here. lover of science, english and learning on the whole. spreading knowledge is one of my favorite things to do! nothing in life is to be feared, it is only to be understood. now is the time to understand more, so that we may fear less. ~marie curie

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